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Some Days Are Rainy Days by ~smurfette1333:iconsmurfette1333:





When I was young,
I dreamed of today;
All the friends I would have
And the things we would say.

It was all quite dramatic,
Since it came from a child.
But I thought then that
I could make today worth while.

But now, this "today"
Dreamed up in the past,
Has yet to show up.
It better come fast.

I doubt it will come,
It's rusted so bad.
It was left in the rain
With other dreams that I had.

That "today" can't move,
Just like the Tin Man;
With no Dorothy to come
And no oil on hand.

I had other dreams,
Along with "today",
But I've lost hope for them.
They've rusted away.

I don't think of them often,
These failed dreams I had.
But whenever it rains,
They seem to come back.

Whenever they come,
I can keep them at bay.
With the help of my friend,
The rain goes away.

So now, as I write
I go for my friend
And I hope that my troubles
Will come to an end.

Now my friend's in my hand,
The only one I can trust.
But again I'm betrayed,
The blade's covered in rust.
©2004-2009 ~smurfette1333
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Submitted: August 10, 2004
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I wrote this last night. It spawned from some things I was feeling at the time, which put this line/idea in my mind. So last night, I finally wrote this poem and wrote it in one sitting, which is kind of odd for me. It usually takes a couple. So, here it is.
The painting is called Some Days Are Rainy Days by Marthe Grace Holifield. It got first place in a contest, and I saw it and thought it would fit the poem.
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:D wow sami.. this is amazing. i really love this!! :+fav:

I doubt it will come,
It's rusted so bad.
It was left in the rain
With other dreams that I had.

that's my favorite stanza.. i just love the connection with the rain... how it kind of washes away with itself.. idk, i just really like this whole poem.. it's beautiful.

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wanna play? :chainsaw:
Wow, I I love this, I adore it, what talent you have! I can relate, I used to be this way, thinking so big and then being disappointed when I expected something to come. I've realized now that I need more than just hope to get those dreams, I can't just let life fall into place. I've never seen something quite like this before and I just adore it, how can I not favorite it? Keep writing, Sami, please.

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i change my mind so much i can't even trust it
my mind changed me so much i can't even trust myself
Wow, I I love this, I adore it, what talent you have! I can relate, I used to be this way, thinking so big and then being disappointed when I expected something to come. I've realized now that I need more than just hope to get those dreams, I can't just let life fall into place. I've never seen something quite like this before and I just adore it, how can I not favorite it? Keep writing, Sami, please.

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i change my mind so much i can't even trust it
my mind changed me so much i can't even trust myself
Wow, I I love this, I adore it, what talent you have! I can relate, I used to be this way, thinking so big and then being disappointed when I expected something to come. I've realized now that I need more than just hope to get those dreams, I can't just let life fall into place. I've never seen something quite like this before and I just adore it, how can I not favorite it? Keep writing, Sami, please.

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i change my mind so much i can't even trust it
my mind changed me so much i can't even trust myself
wow..thank you! haha I didn't think people would like it, cuz i didn't think my rhymes were good. i did change some from the original version cuz they were kinda cliche. sadly so...but thanks! :)

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Heard ten thousand whispering and nobody listening. Heard one person starve, I heard many people laughing. Heard the song of a poet who died in the gutter.
Thank you, that means a lot Kayley.

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Heard ten thousand whispering and nobody listening. Heard one person starve, I heard many people laughing. Heard the song of a poet who died in the gutter.
wow that got posted three times...i don't like version 4, it makes messages take longer to show up so you think they weren't posted. it's quite annoying.

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Heard ten thousand whispering and nobody listening. Heard one person starve, I heard many people laughing. Heard the song of a poet who died in the gutter.
That was posted three times? Yeah I don't like this version much.

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i change my mind so much i can't even trust it
my mind changed me so much i can't even trust myself

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